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warrior_redbird

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the warrior is a child..

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" Pieces"
Jan 5^th, 2004 at 9:31pm

Standing on feet that were bleeding
by a cold and crashing sea
catching a sound in the distance
like a child gently calling to me
   I limped for a ways before seeing
the brokeness under my toes
pieces of something once different
fragments of something once whole
   I was raining and crying in pieces
I was lost and alone on the floor
I was scattered and tattered and beaten
On the edge of a broken shelled shore
I fell to my knees without feeling
the points as they punctured my skin
cradling a shell that was shattered
and crying as i saw her within
   She was tiny and silently hiding
in a corner of a very dark room
child of a father turned rapist
in the shadow of a childhood consumed
   I was crying and dying in pieces
I was shattered and torn on the floor
I was scattered and tattered and beaten
on the edge of a broken shelled shore
   I gathered the brokenness to me
while my tears washed away all the dirt
each little shred was a piece of the past
and I held in my heart the hell and the hurt
   My fingers imparted to each forlorn bit
the pain and the love that I felt
and there on the beach a new growth began
as among the pieces I knelt
   I'd been scattered and shattered in pieces
I'd been left alone on the floor
my teardrops were raining forever
on the edge of a broken shelled shore
   I was standing on feet that were stronger
by a wild and beautiful sea
and the song that I heard in the distance
was the sound of my SOUL finding ME......

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tinygirlchild Share Bear Offline I Corinthians 13 Posts: 457 florida Gender:	Re: " Pieces" Reply #1 - Jan 7^th, 2004 at 8:19am POWERFUL, redbird, and undeniably publishable! what profound expression! wow. ticia
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ciaro Care Bear Offline Bearing through it! Posts: 601	Re: " Pieces" Reply #2 - Jan 7^th, 2004 at 8:27am This is soo beautiful. Thank you for the wisdom of the words. They are so gentle and at the moment I am trying to find a way to be gentle with myself and to let myself heal. Your words have come to me at a very important time for me. with love and thanks ciaro
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lily Care Bear Offline please be patient with me...God isn't finished yet Posts: 682 MI Gender:	Re: " Pieces" Reply #3 - Jan 7^th, 2004 at 11:30am awesome and powerful. thank you. (safe) love, lily
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kjoy Share Bear Offline Do only that which honors the soul. Posts: 458 kentucky Gender:	Re: " Pieces" Reply #4 - Jan 8^th, 2004 at 8:06pm WOW!!!!! Redbird, you are truely a gifted poet...
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I HATE PLAGIARISTS

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HEY....YOU PLAGIARIST
Reply #5 - Dec 24^th, 2005 at 12:52am

HEY YOU DAMN PLAGIARIST...THAT POEM ISN'T YOURS SO BLOODY HELL REMOVE THAT...IF ANY OF YOU GUYS READ THIS COMMENT..KNOW THAT THIS "REDBIRD" IS A FRAUD

THAT POEM ENTITLED PIECES WAS WRITTEN BY CRE FROM www.darkpoetry.com THAT POEM WAS BORN FROM TALENT AND IF YOU DONT HAVE ANY THEN GO HANG YOURSELF RATHER THAN COPYING OTHERS WORKS...YOU IRRITATE ME...PLAGIARISTS SHOULD BE SHOT ON SIGHT

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I HATE PLAGIARISTS Guest	Re: " Pieces" Reply #6 - Dec 24^th, 2005 at 12:54am YOU WON"T DELETE MY LAST COMMENT IF YOU HAVE A CONSCIENCE...JUST LET PEOPLE KNOW THAT YOU ARE A R E T A R D E D PLAGIARIST...
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Zoey Share Bear Offline Always Follow Your Heart Posts: 299 The United States of America Gender:	Re: " Pieces" Reply #7 - Dec 24^th, 2005 at 4:01am Let this be a Warning The Internet can be very very Dangerous. Sincerely Zoey
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JJ

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Re: " Pieces"
Reply #8 - Dec 24^th, 2005 at 10:59am

Not being antagonistic, but just want to know what's going on.

I went to www.darkpoetry.com and found 'pieces' which has been copyrighted by CRE.

Although the person that left the angry message was very aggressive, they had a point.

I don't think it is right to post another person's work and not acknowledge them, taking the credit for yourself.

Sorry, but I know how I would feel if it happened to me.

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Mandi Super Bear Offline Posts: 2909 Texas Gender:	Re: " Pieces" Reply #9 - Dec 24^th, 2005 at 6:26pm I agree with JJ. I think the message was a little bit rough. But I don't like people to copy others in any form at all. It's wrong. Just my thoughts!
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Cindy Share Bear Offline Bearing through it! Posts: 114 originally Louisiana Gender:	Re: " Pieces" Reply #10 - Dec 27^th, 2005 at 3:30pm JJ and Mandi, I agree too with the plagerism. But I also forget sometimes how MEAN people can be!! Such venom! YUCK!! -Cindy
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Tracey Share Bear Offline We grow stronger through our suffering Posts: 349 United Kingdom Gender:	Re: " Pieces" Reply #11 - Dec 28^th, 2005 at 5:23am Is the "Guest" person the actual author of this poem? Is CRE a 'username' from darkpoetry.com or the authors actual initials?
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