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Message started by warrior_redbird on Jan 5th, 2004 at 9:31pm

Title: " Pieces"
Post by warrior_redbird on Jan 5th, 2004 at 9:31pm
   Standing on feet that were bleeding
by a cold and crashing sea
catching a sound in the distance
like a child gently calling to me
    I limped  for a ways before seeing
the brokeness under my toes
pieces of something once different
fragments of something once whole
    I was raining and crying in pieces
I was lost and alone on the floor
I was scattered and tattered and beaten
On the edge of a broken shelled shore
     I fell to my knees without feeling
the points as they punctured my skin
cradling a shell that was shattered
and crying as i saw her within
    She was tiny and silently hiding
in a corner of a very dark room
child of a father turned rapist
in the shadow of a childhood consumed
    I was crying and dying in pieces
I was shattered and torn on the floor
I was scattered and tattered and beaten
on the edge of a broken shelled shore
    I gathered the brokenness to me
while my tears washed away all the dirt
each little shred was a piece of the past
and I held in my heart the hell and the hurt
    My fingers imparted to each forlorn bit
the pain and the love that I felt
and there on the beach a new growth began
as among the pieces I knelt
    I'd been scattered and shattered in pieces
I'd been left alone on the floor
my teardrops were raining forever
on the edge of a broken shelled shore
    I was standing on feet that were stronger
by a wild and beautiful sea
and the song that I heard in the distance
was the sound of my SOUL finding ME......
   

Title: Re: " Pieces"
Post by tinygirlchild on Jan 7th, 2004 at 8:19am
POWERFUL, redbird, and undeniably publishable!  what profound expression!  wow.

ticia

Title: Re: " Pieces"
Post by ciaro on Jan 7th, 2004 at 8:27am
This is soo beautiful.  Thank you for the wisdom of the words.  They are so gentle and at the moment I am trying to find a way to be gentle with myself and to let myself heal.  Your words have come to me at a very important time for me.  
with love and thanks
ciaro

Title: Re: " Pieces"
Post by lily on Jan 7th, 2004 at 11:30am
awesome and powerful. thank you.

(safe) love,

lily

Title: Re: " Pieces"
Post by kjoy on Jan 8th, 2004 at 8:06pm
WOW!!!!!  Redbird, you are truely a gifted poet...

Title: HEY....YOU PLAGIARIST
Post by I HATE PLAGIARISTS on Dec 24th, 2005 at 12:52am
HEY YOU DAMN PLAGIARIST...THAT POEM ISN'T YOURS SO BLOODY HELL REMOVE THAT...IF ANY OF YOU GUYS READ THIS COMMENT..KNOW THAT THIS "REDBIRD" IS A FRAUD

THAT POEM ENTITLED PIECES WAS WRITTEN BY CRE FROM www.darkpoetry.com THAT POEM WAS BORN FROM TALENT AND IF YOU DONT HAVE ANY THEN GO HANG YOURSELF RATHER THAN COPYING OTHERS WORKS...YOU IRRITATE ME...PLAGIARISTS SHOULD BE SHOT  ON SIGHT

Title: Re: " Pieces"
Post by I HATE PLAGIARISTS on Dec 24th, 2005 at 12:54am
YOU WON"T DELETE MY LAST COMMENT IF YOU HAVE A CONSCIENCE...JUST LET PEOPLE KNOW THAT YOU ARE A R E T A R D E D PLAGIARIST...

Title: Re: " Pieces"
Post by Zoey on Dec 24th, 2005 at 4:01am
Let this be a Warning The Internet can be very very Dangerous.

Sincerely :(
Zoey

Title: Re: " Pieces"
Post by JJ on Dec 24th, 2005 at 10:59am
Not being antagonistic, but just want to know what's going on.

I went to www.darkpoetry.com and found 'pieces' which has been copyrighted by CRE.

Although the person that left the angry message was very aggressive, they had a point.

I don't think it is right to post another person's work and not acknowledge them, taking the credit for yourself.

Sorry, but I know how I would feel if it happened to me.

Title: Re: " Pieces"
Post by Mandi on Dec 24th, 2005 at 6:26pm
I agree with JJ.  I think the message was a little bit rough.  But I don't like people to copy others in any form at all.  It's wrong.  Just my thoughts!

Title: Re: " Pieces"
Post by Cindy on Dec 27th, 2005 at 3:30pm
JJ and Mandi, I agree too with the plagerism. But I also forget sometimes how MEAN people can be!! Such venom! YUCK!! -Cindy

Title: Re: " Pieces"
Post by Tracey on Dec 28th, 2005 at 5:23am
Is the "Guest" person the actual author of this poem?

Is CRE a 'username' from darkpoetry.com or the authors actual initials?

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